T2+Narrative+Writing


 * The title of my short story is -** Bully

I am writing a Short Story under the theme Tales of Mystery and Suspense. A narrative is a literary text in which a story is told, with the purpose of entertaining, teaching or informing the reader. The story is usually fiction (imaginary), although it may be based on actual events.

**My learning goal is**
 * 1. Descriptive writing**
 * 2.**

2. What is the problem? 3. What is the reaction? 4. The outcome || * Personality
 * **Plot** || **Characters** ||
 * 1. Who, Where, When, What
 * Appearance
 * Show not tell (infer)
 * Five senses ||

To entertain and capture a readers interest.
 * Purpose/Audience**


 * Content & Ideas**
 * My writing will develop a plot: what is going to happen?
 * I can set the scene of my story by describing the setting: Where / When will the story take place.
 * All of my writing needs to link. How will the story begin? What will be the problem? How is the problem going to be resolved?
 * I can articulate my theme / message through my words.

**Series of actions** L.I. To write a short story by where the text follows a series of actions, carried out by well developed main characters, using language features that capture the attention of the reader.
 * Orientation
 * Complication or problem
 * Resolution
 * Planning my Writing** - Development of Plot **- save here**

S.C. 1.) I can see and point out the orientation, complication or problem and resolution within my story. 2.) I can identify good use of descriptive writing, using ‘show and not tell’, action verbs, past tense, use of the senses (smell, hear, see, taste, feel like) 3.) My writing follows a logical sequence to show a series of actions. 4.) I have used correct spelling, punctuation and grammar in my short story. 5.) I have created imagery in my writing by using metaphor, personification, simile and onomatopoeia.

Title:

Narrative:

There’s this boy walking through the park and he comes across some other boys. One of them says “What are you looking at?” The boy walking through said “Nothing.” Another said “You think your so smart, don’t you?” The threatened boy said “No.” Their leader said “One more smart word and you’ll get a beating.” Then he took their victims hat and said “I’ll take this.” Then their victim said “But thats mine!” Then the boy who took his hat said “No it’s not, its mine, right mate?” Then the boy second-in-command of the gang said to their victim “Yeah, you stole my mates hat, didn’t you?” Their victim nervously said “No.” Their leader said “Well, who cares now, I’m taking it back.” Then after putting their victims hat on, he said, raising his fist “And if you ever try to come across us again and take the hat, you’ll get a punch in the face!!” Then he grabbed their victim by the shirt and threw him to the ground. After that, the gang walked away laughing, leaving their victim on the ground depressed.

I think Bullying is unacceptable because people don’t deserve to be bullied. Forms of bullying such as hairism and name calling is just unfair to every one who gets bullied.

**Teacher Comment

Great use of punctuation Hemi! Your story presents a problem which is very common among young school children. Hopefully with the Kia Kaha program in place, people will become more aware of the issues some children face, and more equipped to help others who are in situations like you have described above. Thank you, Miss Workman.**


 * Peer assessment**


 * Self assessment - Ideas**

What were your writing goals and how have you used them to help you improve the quality of this story? What part of the story do you like the most and why? What have you learnt about your writing from doing this exercise? What areas of improvement would you like to work on in your next piece of writing?